10-10-2014, 01:31 AM
Thanks all for your thoughts!
tectak I agree that this does need work, and thanks for your spot-on pointers. But how on earth did you manage to critique my original post?? I'm really confused about the mechanics of that one. Would you mind trying to undo that?
I had it as passers-by originally but Word corrected me. Guess it's up for debate? I'm ambivalent though and can change it no problem.
I'll do more with the ablution runoff, because the place I'm talking about literally has mini makeshift gutters in the alleys for the literal ablution runoff, seeing as the people stationed there have to wash many times a day. Oh, sorry, run-off. I guess there were all sorts of hypens I was missing!
JM I wasn't sold on the sunny smile either, but I tried to break it up with the hair. Still kinda falls a bit flat though, thanks for that.
Btw Abu you were close-- this is based in Casablanca, but the vibe is similar.
Anyway thanks again all. ^____^
tectak I agree that this does need work, and thanks for your spot-on pointers. But how on earth did you manage to critique my original post?? I'm really confused about the mechanics of that one. Would you mind trying to undo that?
I had it as passers-by originally but Word corrected me. Guess it's up for debate? I'm ambivalent though and can change it no problem.
I'll do more with the ablution runoff, because the place I'm talking about literally has mini makeshift gutters in the alleys for the literal ablution runoff, seeing as the people stationed there have to wash many times a day. Oh, sorry, run-off. I guess there were all sorts of hypens I was missing!
JM I wasn't sold on the sunny smile either, but I tried to break it up with the hair. Still kinda falls a bit flat though, thanks for that.
Btw Abu you were close-- this is based in Casablanca, but the vibe is similar.
Anyway thanks again all. ^____^
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