10-08-2014, 08:25 AM
This poem is wonderful. Speaks deeply to my soul. Very powerful I really like your use of "ephemeral" in this poem really struck hard with me. I really look forward to seeing more of your work posted in the future 
. I'm not the best at critique but only thing that stood out to me was the third to last line about the luggage rack I feel as though u could use a more powerful stanza for this line. I understand your meaning but it just dident punch my soul like the rest did. Great poem thank you for your post
. I'm not the best at critique but only thing that stood out to me was the third to last line about the luggage rack I feel as though u could use a more powerful stanza for this line. I understand your meaning but it just dident punch my soul like the rest did. Great poem thank you for your post