10-08-2014, 02:14 AM
Well, now I understand the hyacinths. 
Reading the first version I thought it could be even shorter but there's a lot I like in the longer version, though I agree it needs a trim. I know nothing about publishing but if you're not happy with this one in any current version you may not want to rush into submitting it. I'll gladly post some comments on the long one given some more time with it. I don't think the title suits the short version as well as it does the longer one.
Off topic: The level of crit will always vary from poster to poster and from poem to poem even from the same poster. Posting in a public forum the poet can chose what to take to heart and what to give the silent finger, emphasis on silent.
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Reading the first version I thought it could be even shorter but there's a lot I like in the longer version, though I agree it needs a trim. I know nothing about publishing but if you're not happy with this one in any current version you may not want to rush into submitting it. I'll gladly post some comments on the long one given some more time with it. I don't think the title suits the short version as well as it does the longer one.
Off topic: The level of crit will always vary from poster to poster and from poem to poem even from the same poster. Posting in a public forum the poet can chose what to take to heart and what to give the silent finger, emphasis on silent.
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