one line haiku

one line haiku

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#16

10-07-2014, 07:36 AM

I love it. Though I'm also not a big fan of "we had". This might be different from your intention but I would try
"Jazz notes our blues unsung"
that's a big change, but it would be something to play around with!

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one line haiku - by Tamara - 10-04-2014, 01:06 PM

RE: one line haiku - by rayheinrich - 10-04-2014, 01:09 PM

RE: one line haiku - by Tamara - 10-04-2014, 01:15 PM

RE: one line haiku - by rayheinrich - 10-04-2014, 01:54 PM

RE: one line haiku - by Tiger the Lion - 10-04-2014, 02:01 PM

RE: one line haiku - by billy - 10-04-2014, 04:03 PM

RE: one line haiku - by bena - 10-04-2014, 05:15 PM

RE: one line haiku - by Erthona - 10-04-2014, 06:06 PM

RE: one line haiku - by Tamara - 10-05-2014, 02:06 AM

RE: one line haiku - by rayheinrich - 10-05-2014, 01:06 PM

RE: one line haiku - by Tamara - 10-05-2014, 02:44 PM

RE: one line haiku - by rayheinrich - 10-06-2014, 10:00 AM

RE: one line haiku - by maximumjake - 10-06-2014, 10:17 AM

RE: one line haiku - by Tamara - 10-06-2014, 05:22 PM

RE: one line haiku - by maximumjake - 10-06-2014, 09:29 PM

RE: one line haiku - by rayheinrich - 10-07-2014, 07:38 AM

RE: one line haiku - by b.abraham - 10-07-2014, 07:36 AM

RE: one line haiku - by donbouquet - 11-11-2014, 07:48 AM

RE: one line haiku - by azure - 11-25-2014, 11:52 AM

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