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10-07-2014, 07:31 AM
I have a picture of an orange-haired woman whispering in your ear as she runs away. I quite like the slant of "leaves" and "me", I wouldn't change that. I'm not crazy about the second line. I get a more vivid snapshot of the same picture from the last line. I would suggest changing that "I" statement to a "You" statement.
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5-10 - by Tiger the Lion - 10-06-2014, 12:38 PM
RE: 5-10 - by just mercedes - 10-07-2014, 05:11 AM
RE: 5-10 - by b.abraham - 10-07-2014, 07:31 AM
RE: 5-10 - by Tiger the Lion - 10-07-2014, 08:22 AM
RE: 5-10 - by Tiger the Lion - 10-07-2014, 09:55 AM
RE: 5-10 - by Muggler - 10-09-2014, 01:25 AM
RE: 5-10 - by Tiger the Lion - 10-09-2014, 07:37 AM
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