A summer's night (first draft)

[tectak]

A summer's night This cliche, surely, is the title and not the first line?
Falling swiftly, like silk sheets
From the statue of time Punctuate. Punctuate. Punctuate. Stop the line start capitalising unless you are a centenarian. One comma, four lines and four capital letter do not make this read well
Beneath its majestic sky Change majestic unless you are a teenager when everything bigger than a quarter pounder is majestic
In the pasture of memories, I rejoice
The warmth and scent of grass How does one rejoice the warmth? Is it like romancing the stone? Punctuate to clarity
Lift my spirit
It begins to dance What is "it"? You do not say
With the swirls of nostalgia
Who call the distant stars to join. Who is who?You do not say

(Any good? cliches?)

A nice try but I am unsure of where it came from or where it went to or what it was.
The whole thing is wishy-washy-wordy and probably the result of slipping the muse a mickey. Tidy it up then give it a backbone so that it can stand on its own meretricious feet. As it is, the central metaphor is a soft lump of jelly.
Good to see you posting. Pursue this.
Best,
tectak