10-04-2014, 06:23 AM
(10-04-2014, 05:46 AM)Leanne Wrote: The title's not generic, it's understated. That allows the poem to stand on its own without being subject to loads of preconception. The edit is really solid -- I quite liked celadon because it's a cool word, but killing it off and having the alliteration of 'green globe' has strengthened the image considerably.perhaps my next poem will be about hitting billy over the head with a celadon-glazed vase. it's a shame to waste such a cool word
Nicely done
thank you for the feedback, glad you like

