beachcombing

[cjchaffin]

I have grown to like the title -- and the poem -- for its solid metaphor.
Generalizing 'breachcoming' to 'searching' then applying that to the couple
-- to the reader as well -- learning about their relationship. Maybe we're
seeing the man learning about the woman, maybe it's an older relationship.
Observing the couple's differences, where on the range from toleration,
to acceptance, to admiration do these fall (I'd say admiration).  All that
good stuff adds interest to a visually beautiful poem.


One last thing:
Do you want that goddess possessive to be goddess' or goddess's ?
The first is much more common nowadays.  While the other isn't wrong,
it may distract some readers who think it is.

glad you're diggin this, and yeah the title is growing on me as well. i just thought it too generic at first, like it didn't really say anything to me beyond "these people are wandering along the beach looking for crap" but now it's taking on a different meaning, one that i like. so i'll keep it for now.

as for the goddess'/goddess's issue, i dunno. it doesn't bug me one way or the other but if it's a stumbling block, i'll take another look at it and make an adjustment. 

thanks again for the great feedback, most helpful!