Colors of Emotion

[vrryan]

I know you can do better! I'm not a good critique but I really love
To give Interpretations.

I wrote this today, I'm not a good writer and I know it. I've rarely written anything, and nothing that I have ever in my life felt this connected to.


Blue and red swim together. i suggest you elaborate this blue and red. Is it a plain color? I suggest you elaborate.
Like the mouth of a river, and ocean. drop the article "a" this is used in singular, but you've got two things being stated. I suggest replacing it with "the".
They will be together, always and forever. drop the word "always", i guess that isn't needed
Mixing and churning, like a sweet potion.  you closed this stanza and left it hanging. Make another line for which the colors mixed into purple since colors change if they're being mixed. I suggest you go for it in a literal action but has deep meaning.

Every time I look upon it, my emotions become a raging sea.
Where I once thought I fit, now doesn't seem so free.  insert "would" between "I" and "Fit".
This feeling I get is new and real.
Time wins this bet. I'm not so sure if this is needed, if it is, elaborate it by making another line.
My walls, they seem to peel.Usually, walls break not peel. I suggest you change this. Make it more stunning on the way you close it. And one more thing, the 2nd stanza doesn't talk about colors but emotion, the title is like being chopped down and divided into different stanzas. I think you should add another stanza about the two together.