Before the White Boards

[Keith]

Really enjoyed reading this poem! I found it incredibly relatable and a fun read.

In particular, I liked the second stanza. I found it particularly appealing because of the flow you have achieved in it, I also enjoyed your description of the murder of crows.

My only criticism would be to alter your ending. It would certainly be improved with the removal of the comma and a further improvement would be to fit the rest of the poem with a more flowing closure rather than the suddenness of the current end.

Thanks for taking the time to comment JEMagine and welcome, I have removed the comma and will have a look at extending the ending I understand what you are saying about the abrupt close. Best Keith