beachcombing

[cjchaffin]

i feel like i've read this before. mmm; like a mule i read all the glass to and fro's and have no problem as far as glass goes, apart from a couple of your replies. i have seen glass fishing flouts and they're almost round but,and this is a big but there's no connection with celadon and glass. celadon is pottery with a green glaze and their saki bottles can be round with a very small neck for the cork to fit. i see nowhere in the poem where you mentioned the celadon was glass so celadon works well for me. the title while obvious in connection to the poem works well enough to stay. i enjoyed the poem and the friendly sarcasm at the end.  so just a few nits for me.

beachcombing*

At high tide, the sea spews forth
green foam and glass fishing floats.how many because i'd have thought more than one or two unusual. would and a glass f... give a clearer image? the the open couplet starts with the poem off well
 
We wait for the waters to recede,
tiptoe around anemones and crabs
until I spot a small celadon orb. a suggestion would be [where] [until] gives an an impression you were looking for something specific.
 
She says it belongs to a Japanese goddess,
her eyes plucked out by a vengeful lover
and cast into the deep.
 
I see nothing more
than a recycled old sake bottle
etched with sand and netting patterns. this is where the confusion with glass lies, if you put this together with the glass floats you come up with glass float, in truth while both serve the same purpose they are very different. floats but different materials.  
 
Tomorrow, I will look for agates
while she searches for the goddess’s other eye. great down to earth finish,



*not really tied to the title, in fact i hate it but can't think of anything better. suggestions?

ugh. you're right. i was using celadon as a color reference but i can see now that that is a mistake. and i should know better, i own a few pieces of said pottery! shameful...

great suggestions. i'll try to clear these points up in the edit. 

thanks billy!