10-01-2014, 09:49 AM
Well said. I'm stuck on 2 very small nits below. I could be wrong about both so let me know.
(10-01-2014, 06:07 AM)Erthona Wrote: Million dollar missilesGood read. Just those couple of questions.
Million dollar missiles
used to kill individual fighters:
a high price to pay
for human life. -- maybe "a human life" as you said "individual"
Remember the old days
when life was cheap?
Good times then, I almost want the last two lines to be one. Something in the vein of "Those were good times" I understand the matter-of-factness is essential.
good times!
–Erthona
©2014
