Million dollar missiles (ed. Paul)
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Well said. I'm stuck on 2 very small nits below. I could be wrong about both so let me know.

(10-01-2014, 06:07 AM)Erthona Wrote:  Million dollar missiles
 
Million dollar missiles
used to kill individual fighters:
a high price to pay
for human life.  -- maybe "a human life" as you said "individual"


Remember the old days
when life was cheap?
Good times then, I almost want the last two lines to be one. Something in the vein of "Those were good times" I understand the matter-of-factness is essential.
good times!
 
–Erthona
 
©2014
Good read. Just those couple of questions.
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Messages In This Thread
Million dollar missiles (ed. Paul) - by Erthona - 10-01-2014, 06:07 AM
RE: Million dollar missiles - by maximumjake - 10-01-2014, 08:33 AM
RE: Million dollar missiles - by Erthona - 10-01-2014, 09:02 AM
RE: Million dollar missiles - by maximumjake - 10-01-2014, 09:44 AM
RE: Million dollar missiles - by Tiger the Lion - 10-01-2014, 09:49 AM
RE: Million dollar missiles - by Erthona - 10-01-2014, 11:18 AM



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