10-01-2014, 04:26 AM
(10-01-2014, 03:34 AM)justcloudy Wrote: Maybe you just need some pictures with the post!Hey, JC, I missed this. Thanks for the pics, when I checked this morning there was nothing so good. Spooky and unusual.
http://www.buzzfeed.com/skarlan/the-clou...ingly?bffb&utm_term=4ldqpgp#1gu9t9g
The last line was a bit too metaphysical imo. ChristoherSea's suggestion tightened it up, but I think you can lose September since it's already in the title. Just thoughts. Thanks for the read!
But mostly thanks for stopping in. I think you're right about September, maybe it could turn on memory or reminder or something better (better, I hope
). I'll try to absorb all the comments and do a double look at Chris', then try a rewrite.Hi, JC
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