09-30-2014, 09:56 PM
it's not the end of the world so i wouldn't overly worry. others will see it as a haiku so it's 6 of 1 and half a doz of another 
on the lawn
watered by my tears
new weeds grow
i should have said more about the piece. while i think it more senryu than haiku i still see it as a good compact piece with all the right components of such. there's certainly an emotional aspect as well as metaphorical one to the poem and together they play off each other.
on the lawn
watered by my tears
new weeds grow
i should have said more about the piece. while i think it more senryu than haiku i still see it as a good compact piece with all the right components of such. there's certainly an emotional aspect as well as metaphorical one to the poem and together they play off each other.
(09-24-2014, 06:24 PM)Tamara Wrote: yep, it is. i should have been careful about what i posted in the title.