haiku
#13
on the lawn
watered by my tears
new weeds grow

The reason it works for me is that it's well known that
people spend a lot of time, $$, and effort to rid their
lawns of weeds. Weeds are symbolic of defeat

A relationship (no matter what kind) that has been lovingly
nurtured is much like a well-tended lawn.

That fast turn, the surprise realization/connection/scene/
image of tears growing weeds, is what makes this a
wonderful haiku.
                                                                                                                a brightly colored fungus that grows in bark inclusions
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haiku - by Tamara - 09-23-2014, 06:00 PM
RE: haiku - by Magpie - 09-24-2014, 01:20 AM
RE: haiku - by Tamara - 09-24-2014, 01:29 AM
RE: haiku - by rayheinrich - 09-24-2014, 06:51 PM
RE: haiku - by billy - 09-24-2014, 03:53 AM
RE: haiku - by Tamara - 09-24-2014, 06:24 PM
RE: haiku - by billy - 09-30-2014, 09:56 PM
RE: haiku - by Mwaba don - 09-27-2014, 08:27 AM
RE: haiku - by haikutec - 09-30-2014, 01:39 AM
RE: haiku - by rayheinrich - 09-30-2014, 06:47 AM
RE: haiku - by haikutec - 09-30-2014, 07:12 AM
RE: haiku - by rayheinrich - 09-30-2014, 09:16 AM
RE: haiku - by billy - 09-30-2014, 09:49 PM
RE: haiku - by Tamara - 09-30-2014, 01:51 AM
RE: haiku - by haikutec - 09-30-2014, 02:02 AM
RE: haiku - by rayheinrich - 09-30-2014, 07:28 AM
RE: haiku - by rayheinrich - 10-01-2014, 03:34 AM



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