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Dear Tamara,
(09-29-2014, 06:45 PM)Tamara Wrote:  ice floes
tonight the moon
is still
We forget that the moon spins pretty fast. I like the implied notion of the moon reflecting off the ice floes that are moving but the moon doesn't appear to move.

Good economy of language that nevertheless gives us a lot of atmosphere.

warm regards,

Alan
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haiku - by Tamara - 09-29-2014, 06:45 PM
RE: haiku - by haikutec - 09-30-2014, 01:18 AM
RE: haiku - by Tamara - 09-30-2014, 01:52 AM



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