Janus

[just mercedes]

Ow! I don't like the font.


Teak wood flowers, snow drops I like the way flowers and drops can be nouns or verbs - or both
cluster on every branch,
small fragrant ones; good imagery
a blizzard without a warning
on a November morning, three 'a' very close together. Nice rhyme here.
it’s as if winter set in early. do you need 'it's'?
You decide to leave,
crocheted leaves exhale
winter and leave shadows; repeat 'winter' - is there another word you could use here?
a white haze on the hills. I like the idea of white shadows
I sing a lone song I think this end line needs punctuation, as you used it in lines 2, 5 and 7.
a red whiskered bulbul hyphenate red-whiskered
flies out to sunshine
and the leaves rustle. I'm not sure about the leave/leave/leaves. I do like the final image your poem leaves me with, the sound and motion fading. I also like the way focus changes during the poem, from close-up of flowers to long shot of hills and out into the sunshine.

I don't know if 'you' is the protagonist speaking generally, or they are addressing someone in particular. A parting of lovers? It doesn't really matter. Good use of sensory stimuli - you had me hearing, seeing, feeling this with you.

Thanks for posting this! I enjoyed.