09-29-2014, 10:45 AM
A well-crafted short poem, somewhat depressing and very powerful in its conciseness.
(09-23-2014, 02:47 AM)Wjames Wrote: The doors kissed to mark the start
of another trip to the ground floor.
Soft jazz battles with the burlap silence This is my favorite line--burlap silence
of a man and woman alone together. alone together... that's clever and sets a good scene
Thoughts stay home to hum, tap, and sigh There may be something awkward about this line. I guess I just don't like the word stay here.
at the sight of another missed opportunity.