09-29-2014, 12:24 AM
Thanks for the comments!
Tamara: I'm not really keeping to any strict syllable count, but I'm dividing the lines so a consistent pace and rhythm is set.
billy: I've added in a couple more stanzas! Hopefully it makes the image clearer. I thought grandparents love their grandkids!
cidermaid: Yeah, that's the idea I'm going for. Guess I should make it clearer. I've edited a few things and added in 2 stanzas, hope that makes it better without losing anything!
Once again thanks for the comments, the first edit is up! I think the title is a huge problem, and am thinking of how to change it.
Tamara: I'm not really keeping to any strict syllable count, but I'm dividing the lines so a consistent pace and rhythm is set.
billy: I've added in a couple more stanzas! Hopefully it makes the image clearer. I thought grandparents love their grandkids!
cidermaid: Yeah, that's the idea I'm going for. Guess I should make it clearer. I've edited a few things and added in 2 stanzas, hope that makes it better without losing anything!
Once again thanks for the comments, the first edit is up! I think the title is a huge problem, and am thinking of how to change it.
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