Why Old People Are Grumpy

[Tamara]

Why Old People Are Grumpy


Sentiments
will transcend  (is will needed, but removing it will make it more like a statement)
into legends

or mere fiction,
if it isn't       (i keep stumbling on isn't, isn't , hasn't)
already.

But the loss  (do you need 'the')
and grief
are real,

and the 'peace',
our ignorance
of history.

No one left
to remember it
soon,

how cockiness (another word instead of cockiness, it doesn't seem to go well with this poem)
left everything
ruined.

and that said i enjoyed the poem, it is concise and the minimalist style makes it effective. are you sticking to any syllable count in the strophes? 

i am not that good in critiquing, i am still trying, learning. thank you.