09-25-2014, 07:23 PM
(09-25-2014, 03:14 PM)Tamara Wrote: The second part of the poem can stand on its own and the loneliness metaphor can be felt by reading just that. I would do away with the first stanza because it does nothing more to the poem. I like the formatting of the first version. It gives more emphasis to the thoughts the poet is trying to convey. I could not relate the poem with the title.
The title ( < 24.9.14 > ) is just a way to un-title a poem without titling the poem "untitled" (which I truly hate to do).
Yes, I like that formatting as well. Yes, it would work without the first stanza; will give that some thought.
Thanks for taking the time to comment, I appreciate it.
a brightly colored fungus that grows in bark inclusions