See what's wrong?

[billy]

does the title come from a porn title

is the 'she' in the song the pony? the meter doesn't sound bad, though i know meter isn't the same with lyrics.
in some places it rhymes in others it don't is that a good or bad thing with lyrics? in general it reads okay and the love of a horse will always be country and western to me, so that's how i see it. i'm crap wit lyrics so it's all i have to offer

These are some lyrics I wrote a year ago, and I thought I'd put them up so' see can tear them apart. They seem clearly to violate the Lyrics primer--anyway, so, if anyone wants to kick these around, I think it'd be instructive:

So She Rides


[Verse]
Parker County, Texas,
Just before the line,
Hitchin' up my pony, 
Peaches getting ripe.

Saw you silhouetted
Like you was made of air
South of the old forty
North of where you care. i like this line i'm getting it's c&w song so far

[Chorus]
I was wise
Until the springtime
I was strong
Til you made me reach

Parker County ever cross your mind?
Every time I eat a peach.

[Bridge]
And she rides on without me
Girl can shoot a gun
And she pulled til it emptied
Saw her pony as she run.

[Chorus]
Now there's scars in the orchard
And the tracks the pony spun
Don't wash out in the summer squalls
And I love that pony, don't it run?