Elevator Music

[billy]

a short poem, a good poem, nothing too much askew, it reads well and has some good images. it catures the moment of the lift ride using brevity. i wonder if both parties felt the same way on exiting the lift.

The doors kissed to mark the start a suggestion would be to use a comma here and start the next line without [of] i do like the enjambment and the image of the doors kissing.
of another trip to the ground floor.
Soft jazz battles with the burlap silence i take it soft jazz is the elevator music? and the burlap part of the decor. again another good image.
of a man and woman alone together.
Thoughts stay home to hum, tap, and sigh
at the sight of another missed opportunity. i like the ending. it's a ball breaker when you want to say something but for one reason or another don't.