09-25-2014, 07:40 AM
(09-23-2014, 07:48 AM)ellajam Wrote:Thanks, yeah, the last line might be a little weak, I'll do some thinking on it.(09-20-2014, 03:31 AM)Wjames Wrote: A baby’s life is on displayNice job on the meter with this one. The tied up/enough rhyme didn't jar at all, interesting. I'm not sure why his mom won't know she failed, that's a little weak to me.
with nothing left to hide,
he cannot take his face away
now facebook is his bride.
He’s bagged and tagged and all tied up,
his likes marked down for sale;
if when he’s grown he’s had enough
his mom won’t know she’s failed.
It always amazes that those same mama bears who would kill if anyone infringed on their offspring put them out on display for the taking. Thanks for posting it, well done.

