Modern Parent
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(09-23-2014, 07:48 AM)ellajam Wrote:  
(09-20-2014, 03:31 AM)Wjames Wrote:  A baby’s life is on display
with nothing left to hide,
he cannot take his face away
now facebook is his bride.
 
He’s bagged and tagged and all tied up,
his likes marked down for sale;
if when he’s grown he’s had enough
his mom won’t know she’s failed.
Nice job on the meter with this one. The tied up/enough rhyme didn't jar at all, interesting. I'm not sure why his mom won't know she failed, that's a little weak to me.

It always amazes that those same mama bears who would kill if anyone infringed on their offspring put them out on display for the taking. Thanks for posting it, well done.
Thanks, yeah, the last line might be a little weak, I'll do some thinking on it.
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Messages In This Thread
Modern Parent - by Wjames - 09-20-2014, 03:31 AM
RE: Modern Parent - by trueenigma - 09-20-2014, 04:53 AM
RE: Modern Parent - by Wjames - 09-23-2014, 02:45 AM
RE: Modern Parent - by billy - 09-23-2014, 02:50 AM
RE: Modern Parent - by Wjames - 09-23-2014, 07:14 AM
RE: Modern Parent - by ellajam - 09-23-2014, 07:48 AM
RE: Modern Parent - by Wjames - 09-25-2014, 07:40 AM
RE: Modern Parent - by vrryan - 09-29-2014, 09:15 PM
RE: Modern Parent - by billy - 09-29-2014, 11:08 PM



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