< loneliness >

[ellajam]

Hey ray, that last line has my head spinning. 1st three lines interesting and beautiful. You, ok. Next three lines, I'm on the edge of my chair. Bam, dull cliche. So, why is that? Really, something as warm as the sun is searingly hot. If you meant something pleasant maybe as warming as the sun. But that's not what you said. Warm as what's left of the sun's energy by the time it reaches us? The sun and the desert. I can't put it together yet, but thanks for bugging me and making me think. One of these reads maybe it will dawn on me.

< the earth is pointed with horns >

       as the desert
       enfolds its wisdom
       with the blessing of sand

       you

       hold your love for me
       in a single point
       that as it enters
       is as warm as the sun

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