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mwaba don: thank you for your input. i was hoping to address some of those issues with the first edit.

tamara: hmm...valid points. i'll have to think on it. thanks for the feedback!

miss ella: always helpful! i miss the fierceness as well, i need to think about how to incorporate that back into the edit. thank you!

chris: also valid points and food for thought (pun intended  ) glad you like the edit, and thank you so much for the ideas!

My three cents:  The opening line I read as child abuse until I took a really GOOD look.  Don't like "construction" at all.  I DO like the edited version though.  MUCH better.  

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