Trinkets (first edit)

[Keith]

I meant this to be a little staccato and hard to read, Thoughts welcome. Why, if its hard to read then people don't read it ?
Trinkets
Week nights
I would head upstairs
two minutes before seven, and do you need and here
 
turn on 'Murder She Wrote'
for my mother – her favourite show.
She would beam;
grateful of trinkets now. is this act a trinket or something else ?
 
Some nights
I'd go back down to my room
and sob. this works very well, explains why she is grateful and changes tone for the reader.

Not crazy about the title or its link but I enjoyed the snap shot of family life and it is one many readers will be able to empathise with. Best Keith
Ps its not hard to read