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[ChristopherSea]

H Chris, I am a little late to the poem, sorry. However, I like the edit  a lot. The core metaphor is maintained and strong.

I was wondering if there was a better adjective than 'construction', perhaps something more gastronomical like 'mass confection' or 'concoction,' at least something along those lines.

Perhaps a new word for grandma's battle title, other than repeating 'warrior,' would add more as well. Something like, '...her own soldiering mom'. See what you think. Cheers/Chris