haiku

[Tiger the Lion]

Hi Tamara, I read that there is something forever carved on the moon that the narrator does not care about. What are you trying to say in L2? Line 2 is your steering wheel.If you replace "the" with the right adjective, you might direct to reader more clearly. I understand the indifference, but you need to care about the indifference just a hint more in L2. Also, you may not need "my" in L3, if the reader is ready to identify with you.
Good Luck,
Paul