09-20-2014, 09:50 PM
Good Tile for a nice poem.
There is a nice flow to your poem.
The metaphors and smooths edges made it a good read.
However, I got the in between meanings of your writing but some line had missing words. (like silk sheets? did you mean like falling silk sheets or sheets being blown by the wind or something?
The word Nostalgia did not fit into the poem for me.
I could point out a cliche but hey what can i say. Nice poem.
There is a nice flow to your poem.
The metaphors and smooths edges made it a good read.
However, I got the in between meanings of your writing but some line had missing words. (like silk sheets? did you mean like falling silk sheets or sheets being blown by the wind or something?
The word Nostalgia did not fit into the poem for me.
I could point out a cliche but hey what can i say. Nice poem.