09-18-2014, 09:58 PM
I really like this piece. I think you could cut the descriptive lines by half, especially the first 3 lines. I can point out where if you'd like.
For me this slice brought a much bigger picture, well done.
For me this slice brought a much bigger picture, well done.
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