09-17-2014, 05:40 AM
(09-17-2014, 05:33 AM)justcloudy Wrote: Maybe:Yes, I definitely like the second one better; thank you very much!
Ants dart in military zig-zags
towards base, a pile
of sand in a crack on the sidewalk;
smoke rises from their graves.
or:
Ants dart in military zig-zags
towards base, a pile of sand
in a crack on the sidewalk;
smoke rises from their graves.
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