The Green Jackets are coming

[Keith]

Keith,

"tears where beating snot bubbles to lips" classic line, great image.
"Children spun like sycamore seeds" another great image.

Excellent use of ambiguity; Were the "Green Jackets" real or just an urban legend. Adds great tension to the poem. The ending of course gives it away, but there is no other way to make your point, if not I would have liked it to stay ambiguous.
Well written with an archetypal metaphor, as it could be applied to many situations.  The only negative I have, and it is not a strong one, is that technically, some parts are a little wordy, but not the extent that it disrupts the reading.

Dale  

Have you read the following article?

Thank you Dale for the concidered reply, I wasn't sure about outing the ambiguity, but as you say I didn't leave myself with much choice. I have trimed some of the fat you mention with quick edit but will keep looking to sharpen the message. Thanks Keith

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