Elephant Song

[Pyxx]

They’re folding down the big-top tent
inside a dust-bowl desert fair
where elephants have come and went
and trod from here and back to there.
I rode the giant wheel back down
after I cleared the shimmering top
of that big tent where all around
its spotlights lit my gentle drop
from swirling winds and whirling stars
into a blending mass of clowns
who promised all the world was ours.
We melted back into the towns
and brought stuffed elephants along
to claim we won them for a song.

A visceral read. I can almost feel the spin of the ferris wheel and hear the cacophony of carnival sounds, it is interesting that while this work appears to be a celebration, there is also something quite melancholy about it.

from swirling winds and whirling stars
into a blending mass of clowns
who promised all the world was ours.

I think I'm getting a little dizzy from reading this, honestly I'm trying to find fault in your use of past and present tense...its all good. I think the use of comma's could come into play here, pun intended ^_^