09-13-2014, 06:04 AM
"Lift my spirit" is fairly overused.
"like silk sheets
From the statue of time" I have no idea what this is supposed to mean. What "statue of time" are you referring to.
"A summer's night
Falling swiftly"
I think should be "falls".
"Beneath its majestic sky" Whose "majestic sky?"
Who or what is "It" in "It begins to dance"
Do you mean "my spirit begins to dance"?
How does anything dance "With the swirls of nostalgia". And what exactly is/are the " swirls of nostalgia". As nostalgia is an emotion, how can it swirl?
"Who call the distant stars to join." "Who" is who?
Dale
"like silk sheets
From the statue of time" I have no idea what this is supposed to mean. What "statue of time" are you referring to.
"A summer's night
Falling swiftly"
I think should be "falls".
"Beneath its majestic sky" Whose "majestic sky?"
Who or what is "It" in "It begins to dance"
Do you mean "my spirit begins to dance"?
How does anything dance "With the swirls of nostalgia". And what exactly is/are the " swirls of nostalgia". As nostalgia is an emotion, how can it swirl?
"Who call the distant stars to join." "Who" is who?
Dale
How long after picking up the brush, the first masterpiece?
The goal is not to obfuscate that which is clear, but make clear that which isn't.
The goal is not to obfuscate that which is clear, but make clear that which isn't.