A summer's night (first draft)

[billy]

ideally you should give something more solid with words like nostalgia, spirit, memories. connect them/it to something solid. not a bad write but it can be improved upon.


A summer's night cliche
Falling swiftly, like silk sheets silk is synonymous with glides which isn't akin to swift a stone falling would suit falling swiftly as a synonym, a would many other things (but not lead)
From the statue of time if you're going to cap every letter a period here would help i do like the image of time you gave
Beneath its majestic sky
In the pasture of memories, I rejoice
The warmth and scent of grass i always thought of grass as cool
Lift my spirit
It begins to dance how, does it do the tango, or perhaps a waltz?
With the swirls of nostalgia nostalgia about what?
Who call the distant stars to join.no need for [the]

(Any good? cliches?)