09-12-2014, 09:16 AM
Paul,
Although your poem is already concise, I think a small edit might give it more punch...or not. Just a suggestion.
september tomato
slips fork;
salad over.
To me it just seems more rhythmically sound, so it has more energy. Just my feel of it. I might change my mind tomorrow
Dale
Although your poem is already concise, I think a small edit might give it more punch...or not. Just a suggestion.
september tomato
slips fork;
salad over.
To me it just seems more rhythmically sound, so it has more energy. Just my feel of it. I might change my mind tomorrow
Dale
How long after picking up the brush, the first masterpiece?
The goal is not to obfuscate that which is clear, but make clear that which isn't.
The goal is not to obfuscate that which is clear, but make clear that which isn't.