Haibun for a Black Cat

[Magpie]

Hey Mark

Reading your reply to JM and learning that the red poppy was exactly that caught me off guard, I like it better metaphorically and almost wish I hadn't known that. ;D I'm far from being a haibun or a haiku expert, but this flowed well, caught my attention (loved the first line) and was fun to read.

In this line: "clinical kills from various positions and the ability to never seem in the least bit flustered; regardless of the situation." I love the clinical kills part but the rest seems rather sexual which threw me off, but really that may just be me.

Also, in the last line you don't need "that".

Thanks for the read!

-justcloudy

Hey Justcloudy,

Thanks for the comments, sorry if I spoilt it by revealing that it actually happened. I am fine with it being read as a metaphor, I was just starting to think that perhaps it may be classed as a cliche as regards metaphors, but I'm ok with it now.
Also I've changed the 'flustered' line so it isn't open to other interpretations, thanks for pointing that out and "that" on the last line.
Thanks again for the comments and apologies for the time it took for me to reply, my internet connection has been wandering a lot recently.

Mark