down the rabbit hole

[cjchaffin]

Hi, I couldn't find anything wrong with this poem. This is very well written. One thing,
I did not.
Four months later,
we signed divorce papers
and she packed her things.
I feel more could be said here.

hi zahrakh. thank you. could you elaborate on your comment, please? do you have a suggestion as to what more could be said, or at least some direction that you, the reader, would like to see the strophe go? because as it is, your crit is pretty vague and doesn't really help me tighten up that section, which it does need.