down the rabbit hole

[cjchaffin]

Def. eat the cake!!! I enjoyed this piece.

hi allison. i'm glad you enjoyed this, but what i'm really looking for is how to fine tune my writing and make it better.

look at it again with a critical eye. what would you extract/add? are there spots where the voice could be stronger? even if it's just one word, or one phrase, or one image, is there anywhere at all in the poem that you would suggest tackling in order to make this shine?

i don't come here for praise. i come here because i want to write better, plain and simple. and don't tell me you wouldn't change a thing.

thank you for the vote of confidence. now rip it apart and make it bleed.