Small Things

[danny_]

thank you ajcohen613, i appreciate your comments.

as a general note, this poem seems overly busy. Some of the language seems a little too chockfull for me. For example, "Black shutter opens the scene:a dragonfly's wings buzzing like blurred fans,an iridescent carapace purple-green in the macro lens-reflected light" seems a tad bloated with description, especially for an opening. Try simplifying things. I'd give you an example of how to do so, but I'm rather tired. Just work with it, you have something here.