09-04-2014, 02:27 AM
some of the phrasing is awkward. The apostrophes are distracting. The sentence secure of s2 us especially awkward. dread as a noun without adequate metaphor is very plain and abstract and comes off appearing lazy.
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The Bookshelf (a sonnet) - by ThePinsir - 09-04-2014, 12:49 AM
RE: The Bookshelf (a sonnet) - by trueenigma - 09-04-2014, 02:27 AM
RE: The Bookshelf (a sonnet) - by Erthona - 09-04-2014, 03:09 AM
RE: The Bookshelf (a sonnet) - by ThePinsir - 09-04-2014, 06:15 AM
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