09-03-2014, 05:17 PM
i got a laugh out of it.
but crudity has that affect on me. (but that doesn't make it a good poem)
the thing is the poem isn't fresh enough, there's a lot of sexual cliche where there should be a lot of original sexuality.
so watch out for the cliche phrase, and try not to use inverted syntax.
i too couldn't work out the tease line.
but crudity has that affect on me. (but that doesn't make it a good poem)
the thing is the poem isn't fresh enough, there's a lot of sexual cliche where there should be a lot of original sexuality.
so watch out for the cliche phrase, and try not to use inverted syntax.
i too couldn't work out the tease line.