Eyelids, edit 2

[ellajam]

Hey, crow, a fun and scary ride. Here are a few notes.

Eyelids

Eyelids

You could run into the field of corn.
You would hear the crisp snap of the leaves shattering upon your advance. I couldn't imagine the leaves snapping, I wanted stalks.
You would smell dust.
You would get tiny, itchy cuts.
It would feel still and uncomfortable, and I'm not sure about the and.
you would be self-conscious because even though running into a corn field seems natural, and maybe even wholesome, it isn't done, and the rattling sound betrays you, You may be able to lose the because.
and what if there are corn snakes?
You could stop mid-stride and echo-locate the road fifty feet away. echo-locate is lovely.
You could stop mid-stride, and huff an pant, wondering at yourself for this queer election. My options for an were a or and, I sort of liked a.
And you could whistle for an hour, there, just to see if something interesting could occur. Love the hour whistling.

You could pretend to be mad in a public place.
You could stare at a red object intensely, worrying about it.
You could masturbate in a gas station bathroom.
You could wash off with pink soap.
You could ask permission first and, after hearing no, cause distress by going into the bathroom for normal reasons.

You could cry out in pain. You could do it whenever you decide it would help.

You won't.

You'll continue to not be on the roof of anything--your car, your house, a crayon rendering of your house. Great line, I especially like not jumping off the drawing.

You could ask irrelevant questions to the pretty girl until she ceases to be joyful. You could hate yourself, then.
You could carry yourself through Minyards as if in no past life were you ever once a slave. Minyards was a disappointing google.

You won't.

You'll continue not to have past lives, or important secrets, or the ability to wink charmingly. Another really good line.
You'll have this life, and shame,
and you'll try not to blink when they come for you.

Thanks for posting this, a repeatedly good read.