First Haiku

[danny_]

We stood in the door.
With snow falling, I asked you...
two moonlit smiles.

i like the image of standing in the open door, snow falling outside. really nice start. after that though i have a problem. asked you what? to marry me? to buy the cheaper toilet paper? just being silly, sorry. also moonlit smiles is not bad, but i imagine in an open doorway there being some living room lights coming through lighting at least one person's face.
keep writing!