Regional Gala

[Keith]

man this did bust me up
nothing like some funny poetry.

a critique because the poem is worth it:
my last impression was that the end should be better. the ending comes up like that bare white behind. it's just your great rhymes are not followed through. plus it would be better to end on the funniest note possible, as a climax. might as well cut the last four lines off, really.

favorite lines:
the ropes and floats my lucky charms.
entered the water like a toad,

heheh

Thanks Danny glad you liked the poem, I think you have a good point about the last stanza, into the edit. cheers Keith

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did you mean skull-capped cheeky?

I did indeed Billy thanks for the read and nit I will tidy. Thanks Keith