09-01-2014, 04:05 PM
(09-01-2014, 06:42 AM)mikhailomar Wrote: From what I understand you live a life restricted by the people around you, urged not to chase after your dreams and hope that maybe in another life you will be free[/color]This is not valid critique.
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(09-01-2014, 04:00 PM)simmon Wrote: The last line "Perhaps my new box will set me free." is kinda illogical to me. Box is a symbol of restriction that create by parents, so he/she did not born with it, and it did not refer to "life". I think I understand what you try to say, but from my point of view: how he/she will be free, if they decided to wait for next life, yet expected to be in another box(restriction)?Interpretation of the work is one thing but it is not valid critique. If english is not your first language then you are to be congratulated for your minimalist comment.
Well... I still new around here, so if I get it wrong, please forgive me. ^ ^"
If english IS your first language then please comment on the poetic qualties of the piece.
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(09-01-2014, 08:49 AM)Qdeathstar Wrote: The box? Why box? A box, a pen, a cage? A box and The Box, especially as the title leaves a dry taste in my mouth.
This may seem to you to be useful critique but you offer nothing by way help to the writer. Please modify your input.
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(09-01-2014, 06:42 AM)mikhailomar Wrote: From what I understand you live a life restricted by the people around you, urged not to chase after your dreams and hope that maybe in another life you will be free
This is not valid critique of the poem and is a poor effort at analysing the poet. Limit your input to the former and do not make any inferences at all about the latter.
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