08-31-2014, 01:58 AM
dang guys, can't deny some of these crits. i have posted a revision. here is some analyzing what happened in the first place:
"shuttered inward" was an abstract way of saying that the next photo frames step closer and closer. i know that shutter is the length of time the lens is open to let light in. it is also the only thing responsible for a final image. so i'm thinking it came out as the change of a noun to a verb, shutter to shuttered. i looked it up and apparently it's called verbing. my brain must have done that to try to say as much as possible with fewest words. but then it's true that it doesn't quite go with the rest of the poem which seems to be more of a movie than still frames.
thanks again all
"shuttered inward" was an abstract way of saying that the next photo frames step closer and closer. i know that shutter is the length of time the lens is open to let light in. it is also the only thing responsible for a final image. so i'm thinking it came out as the change of a noun to a verb, shutter to shuttered. i looked it up and apparently it's called verbing. my brain must have done that to try to say as much as possible with fewest words. but then it's true that it doesn't quite go with the rest of the poem which seems to be more of a movie than still frames.
thanks again all
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