Small Things

[danny_]

thanks for your replies. it just came out this way first time around. the breaks felt right when i wrote it. but your replies helped me see the need to pay attention in general to my line breaks. i'm sure a lot of my work could use a second look in that regard.

"Closer still we are shuttered inward" - that works for me, but it may be the line break again that messes it up.

interesting about "static." i'll ask a few others i know what they think. it should be understood as a sound or even the sensation of static electricity.