The Art Of Chrysanthemums

[billy]

while there are some good images in the poem.

chrysanthemums each morning;
and on return,
float their painted tongues
in glass bowls.

to show one; the poem feels a little too heavy.

caught
in the spindrift of creation,

makes the poem almost too surreal


i do like how you use chrysanthemum's as the carriage, and it does work. there just seems to be to much going on.